My Home Work Story

WALT:  Entertain

Description: We read the poem “My Remarkable Journey” which inspired us to write our own remarkable journeys about why our homework wasn’t at school today.

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Criteria:

We decided that a quality piece of writing has the following things. Reflect on whether these things are in your story:

Introduction: It hooks the reader in the first few lines making them want to read more

Punctuation: Is your writing ready for a reader? Does your punctuation make it easy for them to read?

Short sentences: Do you create suspense by using these in your writing?

Onomatopoeia: Are these in your writing to create impact?

Alliteration: Are these in your writing to create impact?

Similes/Metaphors: Are these in your writing to create impact?

Evaluation:

1. What do you think is the best part of your story? When I went through the portal and ended up in a beach.

2. What was the hardest part about completing this portfolio sample? The part that was most hard was writing in my book because it took for ages.

3.  Next time, what is a goal you can work towards? My goal is to be faster at writing if I ever did this again.

Feedback/Feedforward:  Good work Taylor I think that was a very good story. But next time you should make it a bit shorter. #Olivia.

Here is my story.

It was I normal morning well not really. The alarm went homework day, homework day, homework day. If you are asking it always sounds like that on a Monday. Mum said "Taylor your alarm went come down stairs" so I went down stairs, carelessly because I had Mr Rotter today and he is the worst teacher in history. He gives me more homework then anyone in the school. I got ready for and headed for school with my friends.

The bell rang and we got in class. Mr Rotter gave us our homework and said in a grouchy voice "go home now and do your homework it is due tomorrow."

I walked home and said to myself "30 pages that's not fare." I opened my door and went up stairs.

I was sitting on my bed with my dog called Fareless doing my homework. Fareless heard a sound. "What is it boy" I said. Suddenly lightning came out of no where. "Why is there lightning? Its not even been raining." I said. Then a ugly which came out of the lightning. She was on her broom stick. My dog tried to hide under my bed covers but it didn't work because his bottom was sticking out with his tail.

The which turned my dog into a fire breathing dog with it's flamed tail. I tried to calm him but it wouldn't work. Put hey were after my homework. The which's broom was a homework eating broom. The broom charged down at me almost about to reach my homework. But I ran faster.

I went down a long distance hallway with the which chasing after me. I saw one of my cats called Crazy Candy. He is called that because when ever we get candy he runs after it. Anyway I picked him up and I was holding him in my arm and my homework in my hand. Crazy Candy was behind my homework. The which turned Crazy Candy into a four legged paper shredder. It was trying to get my homework. I dropped him slowly because inside I knew Crazy Candy was still in there somewher.

The which did a spell and then I ran through a portal. When I entered the portal it took me to the beach. I was still running the but on the hot hot sand and a shark with four legs chasing after me. The which turned me into a flying dolphin so then I started flying almost about to dive in the water. While I was flying I thought that maybe the which would met in the water. I dived right down into the water and the which said "I am not afraid of you or water". Then she dived in. "Aaaarrrrr" said the which. The which melted. I forgot that I had my homework and it ripped to pieces and sank to the bottom of the deep blue sea. 

I was back home and everything was back to normal except for my homework. "Everything must have gone when the which melted". My room was all tidy. I was about to go to bed when Fareless came.

I woke up getting ready for school. Once I was ready I went straight to school. "That's why I don't have my homework Mr Rotter" I said. You get a A+ for telling a great story. But seriously where is your homework said Mr Rotter. " I told you already I don't have my homework I said once again. 

I went homeland had a big nap.