I enjoyed reading your writing. I think that you could try make you pictures a bit bigger so we can all see it. I like the way you have added all the things I have asked for. Next time you could try with some more sort sentences! Well done! Bella
I liked the use of alliteration in the opening paragraph as well as the descriptive language. This made it more interesting and I wanted to read on. You are good at writing lots of information about what we did. I would have liked to hear more about one part of camp that made the most impact.
I enjoyed reading your writing. I think that you could try make you pictures a bit bigger so we can all see it. I like the way you have added all the things I have asked for. Next time you could try with some more sort sentences! Well done! Bella
ReplyDeleteI liked the use of alliteration in the opening paragraph as well as the descriptive language. This made it more interesting and I wanted to read on. You are good at writing lots of information about what we did. I would have liked to hear more about one part of camp that made the most impact.
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